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If I were to wish upon a star,
It would have to be the biggest,
The fastest, The brightest, the Fittest,
Hale's comet would burn me alive,
I'd be frozen in space, living on the ice,
My wishes would float in it's tail like a list,
It's a long bloody list, and it goes like this.

I wish for a life,
I wish for wealth,
All my selfish needs,
I indulge upon myself

I wish for a wife,
I wish for my health,
All my human greeds,
Trophies for my shelf.

Would I wish for peace,
Or for War to cease,
Or Just grease My own Palms.
In the storm before the calm,
Or Preach Psalm's from the book,
I don't believe, But I'd give it a look,
If all it took, was believing in unity,
Holding hands, you me and everybody,
Surely we'd all be, One, If that was my wish.

I wish upon a lie,
I wish for Mankind,
I wish for a friend.
And I still want truth,

I wish for I
I wish for my Mind,
I wish for a Fiend,
Eye for an eye,

Your tooth is hanging loose.
Your Truth is loose.
Your face is in the noose.

It's a long bloody list, And I'm just getting started.
Between greed and being God, I feel cold hearted.
Between Being Great, and Just being human,
I'd only be great, to intice you in,
I'd Bathe in my own glory, before seeing yours,
And that's the reason for my high horse.
Wish upon a time, Wish upon a candle.
Wish upon a wish, Till My wish you can't handle.
A frank admission of guilt, I've flown off the handle,
My white robe and sandles, My Beard's a disguise,
I can't grant these wishes, I can only spin lies,
Tangled in my web of hope, I only hope you cut the rope,
And I wish, I could give up wishing.
But it helps me cope.
If greed were green, I'd drown in cyan seas,
Bled blue by humanity's need, To feed two seeds,
One is myself, and the other is charity.

If I were to move from horse to pedestal, I'd only fall.
I'd lose balance, half man, half god, all animal.
I'm glad I cant wish, I'd be worse off If I could,
But I'll always be wishing, and I knew that I would.
Wish upon myself, I wish I understood.
I wish I could Stand, Stand up, Stand against, Stand tall.
Damn it all.
I'm like a baby losing balance, but it's all in my head,
Should I keep on wishing, or act out instead,
Walk the streets, being careful where I tread,
Find out other peoples wishes, People who just want bread,
Food, heating, dishes,
Blood to replace what they've been bled.
And I've been blessed, Kissed, By Life, not a lamp.
I am a god, compared every other tramp.
But every tramp, Is a champ, Champion,
From chump, to moving on, No matter what, No matter where,
No matter who, Who cares or who stares.
Do they wish, Or just exist, Do I exist, and there's the twist.
If I can't apreciate who I am, Who am I,
I'm the wish that I lie, The Effort that I don't try,
The hand that became a fist, Then a palm,
Blowing dust in the wind, Along with a wish.
©2007-2009 ~Morbid-Engel
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:iconpurelywiccan:
I can completely identify with this and I do think it is one of your best poems. I don't really think there's anything wrong with having drive and desires, as long as they don't turn you bitter. But it is very much that cliche "human nature" I think it's ok to be selfish, everyone is selfish, even when they do things for others it's really for themselves, like having children for example. Am going to favourite this, I think it's well written and very truthful. xox
:iconmorbid-engel:
Thanks Molly, I did spend an abnormaly long amount of time on this one, mostly on structure, the meaning kinda flowed.

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Am I an optimist? I hope so.
:iconpurelywiccan:
Yeah I can tell, I'm glad you did.
:iconpoetintheshower:
Mind blowing. I've read this piece over and over and just adore it. Your rhythm is fantastic and you seem to change rhyme schemes and styles with such ease. I love this idea of a list which is ever ending and will never be complete, or come true. I also love the Palms and Psalms imagery which seems to twist into each other and trip off the tongue so well - excellent work. You mock religion in a very risky and head-strong way, but so beautifully at the same time. Very inspiring.
:iconmorbid-engel:
Thank you!

The easiest way to check your rhythm is to just speak poetry aloud as you write it. It does tend to become very "spoken word" as you do this, but that's just because it is.

While I realise I'm mocking religion, I also mock myself which is why it works. I'm a humanist, so i believe in the worth of mankind as a whole, so wishing and praying annoys me, but so does arrogance, and on that level, My own arrogance, which I mock here. Bringing it to an end of realisation that need each other to coexist, whether you need food, or just a subtle message to knock you off of your "high horse".

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Am I an optimist? I hope so.
:iconpoetintheshower:
Thats a good tip, thank you.
I find your work and your ideas really interesting and really inspirational.

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